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KagekaoxSuicide Sadie icon
I've decided to make a few icons of couples I like, as well as supporting buttons for those who want to put them on their profiles. I wanted to start by one of my favorite couples: Kagekao and Suicide Sadie. Look at them, they're so cute :3

The button will be submitted very soon. I'm planning on making other couple icons and buttons, such as AuthorxHope, KyotoxIvy or NeoxRaizen. I'm not very romantic nor usually show sympathy for couples, but... it doesn't mean I don't like them. Why not showing some support for once? I haven't met love, although it must be great, yet painful at times. It's also a little change for my stuff; I want to submit something happier in the middle of dark things.

Oh, yeah, free to use, btw!

Update: I edited it to match Sadie's revamp. She was supposed to be semi-transparent, but GIFs don't only allow 0 or 255 opaque pixels.

Kagekao © :icongingaakam:

Suicide Sadie © :iconcorgicakes:
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KagekaoXSuicide Sadie button by Lagoon-Sadnes
KagekaoXSuicide Sadie button
As promised, here is the button of one of my favorite couples :heart: As they're killers, I've added a few splatters of blood on the background. They're a cute couple, but they're CP OC's after all.

I've got another icon prepared, nevertheless I'll submit it later.

Next likely couple: Author and Hope.

Oh, yeah, it's free to use! You can copy the thumb code and paste on your profile if you want to use it. You can also copy this and paste it on your profile:

<*a h*ref="h*ttp:*/*/lago*on-sadnes.deviantart.com/art/KagekaoXSuicide-Sadie-button-399575*333"><im*g s*rc="ht*tp:/*/fc0*8.devia*ntart.net/fs71/f/*2014/301/3/5/kagekaoxsui*cide_sadie*_button_by_lagoon_sadnes-d6lwaat.png*">*<*/*a> Remove all the *

I used a template to make the button, though I can't find the link to it :/

Update: Corgi asked me to edit the button, since she revamped Sadie. I forgot to do it when she told me and didn't remember until today. Sorry ^^U I'll fix the icon too. (Also, I think it's noticeable is if you look closely enough, but... Sadie's got some transparency. Let's say Kage's 100% opaque and she is 70%.)

Kagekao © :icongingaakam:

Suicide Sadie © :iconcorgicakes:
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Hi there! I wanted to measure Blitz too with the same test I did yesterday :D Here are the results!

Blitz: … -_-

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First, the short one:

 

[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon 
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong 

[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour (I don’t think it’s a strange color for a ghost.)

[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour (Silver gray… Nah, there are people with grey eyes.)

[ ] This happens to be red 
[ ] Their eyes change colour 
[ ] They have wings 
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[/] (if a female) they have large bra size (It’s a quite big, but normal size. She isn’t like those anime girls with more tits than head -.-)

[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular 
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender 

[x] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc (Yeah, it can be called a “sixth sense)
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers 
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers 
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family 
[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature

[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender 
[x] They have lots of friends/no friends (Totally xD Almost anyone who knows her doesn’t like her.)
[ ] They are emo/cutesy (HAHAHAHAHAHA)
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are

[x] They are currently in a relationship (Believe it or not, yes.)
[ ] They have lots if morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem. (“Kill them all” is her principle…)

[ ] They have a mental
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane (She’s already insane)
[x] They are a psycho (Yeah, totally)
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent 
[ ] They have hallucinations 
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc. (SHE is a ghost xD)
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit 
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul 
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[x] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows 
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name (Claire is a normal name. I checked it precisely to give her a normal name.)
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstice etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label' 

[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives 
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something 

 [ ] They have a rare blood type 
[ ] They cry blood 
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy 

[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of (insert profession/power here)

[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] The have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy 

[ ] They are 'the chosen one' 
[ ] They have insomnia

<5 -Anti-Sue
6-15 -Balanced Character
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
26< -Mary-Sue

11 – balanced character

 

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Point Ratings:
0-15: Doing fine; this character is balanced and believable, without any/many overwhelming Sue qualities. Good job!
15-25: This character is acceptable, but not humble.
25-40: Getting into Sue territory; you might want to go over the character again.
40-50: It would be a good idea at this stage to seriously reconsider this character, as they can qualify for a Mary Sue.
50+: You've got a Sue on your hands. I recommend killing it with fire.
80+: What the hell are you thinking!?

Example Scores:
Colonel Hans Landa (Inglourious Basterds): 10
Edward Cullen (Twilight): 92
Granny Weatherwax (Discworld): 10
Artemis Entreri (Forgotten Realms): 53
Riddick (Pitch Black, Chronicles of Riddick): 23

Remember, just because a character gets points for something doesn't mean that they're a Sue. It's when the points start to pile up that the trouble begins. Even if ones are innocuous, too many and you might have a problem on your hands...

Section I: General Traits

1) The character's name, is it... (1 point each)
a) An unusual name for the character's locale/culture/race/time? (ex. Sakura or Hiromi for a non-Japanese, an English medieval peasant named Madison). (Claire is a normal name.)
b) A more ordinary name, spelled differently so that it's more unusual?
c) A noun or verb not usually used as a name? (ex. Wolverine, Hunter, etc.)
d) A nickname that was chosen because it sounded cool? (ex. Raven, the Jackal) (Her nickname is chosen because she can control electricity: “Blitz” means “Lightning” in German.)
e) A New Age, gothic, or just darn whimsical name? (ex. Moonlight Raven Winterschild, Ebony Tamora Eclipse, Lady Amelia Dianne Clark the Third, etc.)

f) The name of a god, goddess, or mythical hero? (ex. Ares, Juno, Isis.) ( I don’t know of a goddess named Claire or Blitz xD)
g) Obviously the name of a historical figure? (ex. Bonaparte, Cleopatra, Diogenes. Common names like William don't count.)
h) Something just 'perfect' for them? (ex. Jade, for an aloof or cool character.)

2) Does the character have an impressive-sounding title or a unique address? (1 point.)

3) Is the character exceptionally beautiful or handsome? (2 points.) Or are they merely pretty or good-looking, but not striking? (1 point.) (+1)
...Is their beauty frequently described (or remarked upon by others)? (2 more points.) (Her bf doesn’t count for obvious reasons, so no.)
...By characters who don't normally do that sort of thing? (2 more points.)
...Are they described in poetic terms or purple prose? (1 more point.)
...IN DIALOGUE!? (3 more points.)
...Do they still look good even when they should not be, such as after being tortured, wounded, badly sick, in battle, etc?) (2 more points.)

4) Do other characters fight over the character because of their good looks? (2 points.)
...Is anybody envious of or feels threatened by their beauty? (1 point.)

5) Conversely, is it emphasized that that character is not beautiful or attractive, despite evidence to the contrary, such as a great number of other characters falling in love with/lusting after them? (3 points.)

6) If male, is that character a chick magnet? If female, do all the guys want her? (3 points.)
...Does this charm defy sexual orientation? (4 points.)

7) About the character's charisma, are they able to make friends/allies easily? (1 point.) (Pfffff, no, haha)
...Even with otherwise unfriendly characters? (1 more point.)
...Can they regularly convert enemies to allies with their charm? (3 points.)
...Do other characters automatically trust them? (2 points.)
...Even characters that are of a suspicious/untrusting mindset? (4 points.)
...Are they good at talking someone into doing what they want or giving out information? (1 point.)

8) Does the character have a great physique, which is shown or described in loving or drooling detail? (2 points.)
...Does it defy their eating/exercise habits? (3 points.) (She doesn’t eat; she’s dead…)
...Are their proportions impossible or extremely difficult to achieve? (ex. A D-cup on a 28-inch bust, a 6'1 girl weighing 100 pounds but not anorexic, etc.) (5 points.)

9) Looks aside, is the character in the pink of health despite detrimental habits? (ex. a chain-smoker with healthy lungs, very heavy drinker with healthy liver and skin, etc.) (5 points.) (She drinks a lot, but she’s a ghost, so it doesn’t affect her. Guess it’s a +5.) (+5)

10) Back to looks, does the character have any of the following? (1 point each.)
a) An unusual eye colour for their race/species? (ex. purple, blue if Asian, yellow)
b) A distinctive or unusual birthmark, especially if it's noticeable?
c) Eyes with any other odd characteristics, such as vertically slit pupils or mismatched colours? (+1) (Her eyes have no pupils.)
d) Colour-changing eyes? (3 points.)
e) Mood-ring eyes? (5 points.)
f) An unusual hair colour for their race/species/animation? (ignore if it's dyed. 3 points if it's natural.)

g) Multicoloured hair? (5 points if it's natural.) (O_o)
h) Cool tattoos?

11) Does the character have a scar that does not actually detract from their appearance, but makes them look cool? (1 point.) (Only a dot in her right arm, a very small one. It doesn’t make her look cool, though)
...Is this scar in an odd shape for which there's no real accounting? (3 points.) (I guess a syringe mark is easy to figure it came from.)

12) Does this character get a disproportionate amount of description or screen time compared to the other characters? (2 points—ignore if they're the main character.)

13) Does the character smell really good—and it's not their perfume, shampoo, or soap? (1 point.) (She doesn’t smell of anything –except for when she’s covered in blood; then she stinks.)

14) About the character's clothing... (1 point each.)
...Was it chosen to make them look extremely cool? (bonus point if it involves a lot of black, leather, high-heeled boots, or a trench coat. Or, god help you, all of the above.) (Lots of black and fingerless leather gloves.) (+2)

...Is it very expensive and/or cool/trendy? (Not expensive and… quite normal.)
...Is it very impractical or inappropriate for the character's setting or profession, but nonetheless looks good? (ex. high heels on a soldier's combat boots, a miniskirt on a nun, etc?) (4 points.)

...Are there weapons stashed in there? (She’ll have a knife attached to her belt, but not as decoration. However, since I’m focusing on her main story and not on Links of the same chain, it’s a no.)

15) Can the character get away scot-free with being openly disrespectful or insubordinate toward authority figures and/or superior officers? (3 points for limited occasions, 5 points if it's regularly.) (no.)

16) Is the character always 'right?' (2 points.)
...And do they regularly prove other characters 'wrong?' (2 more points.)
...Are the other characters cowed by this one's greatness and authority, and agree to do, think, or believe things the character's way, even if they were firm about their beliefs and habits before? (4 points.)

17) If anyone disagrees with or dislikes the character, are they stupid, nasty, jealous, just plain wrong, or evil to 'justify' their dislike of the character? (5 points.)

18) Is the character socially popular? (1 point.)

19) If the character has an attitude, temper, or spitfire personality, are the tongue-lashings they dole out to other characters 'justified?' (2 points.)

20) If the character's in trouble, is there always someone there to bail their ass out of the fire? (2 points.)

21) Is the character always punished more harshly than is normal for the infraction they've committed? (2 points.) (no)
...Or do they always get off easy? (4 points.)

22) Does the character always have money for whatever they might want? (1 point.)

...Even if they have no day job or source of income? (2 more points.) (She steals.)

...Are they fabulously wealthy, heir to a large fortune, or just provided for? (3 points.)

23) About the character's past, were they...
a) Tortured? (2 points.)
b) Orphaned? (2 points.)
c) Abandoned? (2 points.)
d) Enslaved? (2 points.)
e) Abused? (3 points.)
f) The only survivor of some disaster/genocide/etc? (3 points.)
g) Raped? (4 points.)

(She was killed in an unfair way.)

24) Is their whole family dead? (2 points)
...Did the family die/be killed in front of them? (4 points.)

25) Is this character meant to be an ideal? (ex. If male, is he a paragon of rugged masculinity and an inspiration to all? If female, is she all sweetness and purity, or else a tough independent warrior woman?) (3 points.) (No, hohohoho xD)


26) Is the character unusually and improbably advanced for their age/social status/whatever? (ex. the 15-year old general of an army, the 12-year-old going to university). (5 points.)

27) Are they very accomplished? (2 points.)
...Are they remarkably accomplished in more than 1 area? (3 points for each.)

28) Is the character the youngest ever to attend an academy/join an organization/attain a rank/etc? (5 points.)
...What about the only woman (or man, in a female-dominated field/society) to do that in known history? (4 points.)


29) Is the character the best or among the very best at something they do? (3 points for each thing.)

30) Are even the most cynical, anal-retentive, exacting, or fussy characters awed or impressed by this character's skills? (4 points.)

31) Everybody loves music! Does the character... (1 point each.)
...Have a lovely singing voice?
...Play a musical instrument? (1 point for each instrument.)
...Can they play by ear?
...Can they make anyone cry with how beautiful their singing/playing is?
...Have an especially pleasant/sexy speaking voice?

32) Sprechen Sie Deutsch? Speaking of which, does the character fluently speak any languages apart from their native tongue? (1 point for each.)
...Do they have a gigantic vocabulary in some language, whether it's their native one or not? (1 point.)
...And does it exceed their age and/or educational level? (2 points.)

33) When the character does something, do they always succeed? (5 points.)

34) Are the character's parents/guardians unduly restrictive or demanding? (1 point.)
...Or do they just let their kid run amok? (2 points.)

35) Is the character undeservingly outcast or despised by people? (2 points.) (+2)
...Is it because of their talent, their powers, or their intellect? (4 points.)
...Is it because of their beauty? (5 points.)

(It’s because she’s damn disagreeable and rude.)

36) Do they have a tormented, angst-ridden past? (3 points.) (+3) (I guess being killed in order to make a corrupted politician’s crimes is a tormented, angst-ridden past, even if the rest of her life she had a normal, happy life.)

37) Is the character very intelligent? (1 point.)
...Do they have very good intuition? (1 point.)
...Are they a genius? (3 points.)
...Do they have an IQ of 6420340? (5 points, and learn how IQ tests work, please.)

38) Do they have a wide variety of talents? Are they a renaissance man/woman? (ex. cooking, mechanics, carpentry, driving, botany, etc.) (3 points.)

39) Is the character a very good mimic for ordinary (non-magical) skills? (ex. they can emulate accents, dances, etiquette, etc, by observation) (2 points.)

40) Do they have a great memory? (1 point.) (+1)
...Is it photographic or eidetic? (3 points.)

41) Is the character's appearance unsuited to the time or place? (ex. a cavewoman with shaved legs, somebody wearing bifocals in the historical Middle Ages, etc.) (4 points.)

42) Is the character related to royalty or nobility? (2 points.)

43) Are they particularly well-travelled? That is, greater than the norm for their surroundings? (1 point.)
...How about in a time/place where travel was not extensive? (1 more point.)

44) Are the character's flaws limited to small, insignificant ones that won't do any harm, or even endear them, such as adorable clumsiness? (3 points.)
...Are they mentioned, but never see use in-story? (Informed flaws.) (5 points.)

45) Does this character obviously get preferential treatment over the other characters—that is, do they get to take all the nicest presents? (ex. If a special or helpful item is found, this character gets it. If someone is to have a great bit of dialogue or action scene, it's this character, and so on and so forth) (5 points.)

46) Is the character able to make accurate snap judgements of other characters? (3 points) (She mistrusts everyone, so she isn’t accurate at all.)
...Are they always right? (5 points, and go soak your head.)


47) Is the character able to get away with just about everything they do, no matter how insolent/nasty/destructive/obnoxious/etc, without invoking karmic backlash of some sort? (5 points.) (Yeah.) (+5)

48) Does the character have a familiar or an animal companion? (1 point.)
...Is it something "cool," like a wolf? (1 more point)
...Is it a magical creature or a demon? (1 more point.)
...What about something major, powerful, or large, like a gryphon or a dragon? (2 more points.)

49) Does the character have any special/magical items that make the going easier on them? (ex. an enchanted sword, a glowing crystal ball to light the way, a bag of holding.) (2 points per item.)

50) Is the character the most powerful mage in the world? (5 points.)
...Or are they just a very skilled or powerful one? (3 points.)
...Or are they just your average mage? (1 point.)

51) Does the character practice a type of magic that is not usual for their sex/social standing/training level/whatever restrictions apply? (3 points.)

52) Is the character an alien, or something else not human? (1 point.) (+1)
...Are they of a 'superior' species? (3 points.)
...Are they a hybrid of some sort? (1 more point.)
...What about if hybrids are really rare or generally impossible in their canon/setting? (5 points.)

53) Is the character possessed of any cybernetics that enhance their natural abilities or give them new ones? (ex. infrared, super strength, ability to hack computers with their MIND) (1 point per enhancement.)
...If not cybernetics, is the character possessed of super-powers that give them these traits? (2 points per ability.) (Somehow, yes.) (+2)

54) If the character is a vampire, do they sparkle? (If they do, stop taking this test immediately and learn the bloody folklore. If you insist on continuing, take 15 points.) (I think someone hates Twilight. Don’t worry, I so do I.)
...Or are they just an ordinary vampire? (2 points.)
...Are they angsty? (3 more points.)
...Do they have less weaknesses than is traditional? (ex. not averse to garlic, cannot be harmed by silver) (2 more points per weakness removed.)
...Do they have more powers than is traditional? (3 more points per added ability.)
...Are they a 'good' vampire? (2 more points.)

55) Is the character tough, physically, emotionally, and/or mentally? (1 point.)
...Are space marines wimpy compared to this character? (2 more points.)
...Is the toughness only stated, but never actually shown? (4 more points.)

56) Do they regularly receive new skills or weapons? (3 points.)

57) Do they master any skills in an improbably quick amount of time? (ex. becoming fluent in a language in a few weeks, mastering a type of magic within a few months where it usually takes years, etc.) (3 points.)

58) About weapons, can they use any? (1 point per weapon. Ignore if the character in question is with a military or paramilitary organization and this is included in the standard training package. Take points for non-standard weapons.)

...Do they tend to carry an arsenal along with them? (2 points.)
...Even when it's inappropriate to do so? (2 more points.)
...Do they carry a weapon that is inappropriate for the surroundings? (ex. a broadsword in WWII era, etc.) (4 points.)

(She doesn’t use weapons… unless you count her fists and feet :/)


59) Does the character look younger than they are? (1 point.)
...Significantly younger? (2 points; 1 if they use potions/suck life force/etc to remain young)
...Are they an immortal? (3 points.)
...Or is there no explanation for this at all, apart from a desire to keep the character young and pretty? (5 points.)

60) Is the character liked by the whole cast? (5 points) (No xD)

61) Are the character's observations consistent with objective reality? (5 points)


Section II: Fanfic Characters

1) So when they get introduced, does the reader get scads and scads of description on them in fine, loving detail? (4 points.) (No. She barely describes herself in her story amd doesn’t do it in a loving way precisely…)

2) Do they ever get into a romantic or sexual relationship with a canon character? (3 points; 5 points per instance if they get with multiple canon characters.) (No, it’s with an OC.)
...Is the canon character altered in any way to better fit this character, or do they otherwise act differently when they're with them? (5 points.)

3) Does this character take the spotlight away from the main cast? (4 points; 1 point if the OC in question is the main character in a cast of mostly original characters.)


4) Does this character ever show up one or more of the canon characters? (ex. A villainous OC humiliating Darth Vader or outwitting Havelock Vetinari.) (3 points per instance.) (nope.)

5) Are the rules of the canon bent or broken for this character? (ex. a 9-year old being admitted to Hogwarts) (5 points per instance.)

6) Is the character basically a gender-swapped version of a canon character? (3 points.)

7) Is the character a clone of a canon character? (2 points.)
...What if cloning isn't part of a world's canon? (5 points)

8) Does the character possess a trinket similar or identical to something a canon character has? (3 points; ignore if everyone in the canon has this item)
...Does it have the same powers/carry the same significance? (2 more points. Ignore if it's a typical item as above.)
...Does it turn out that the canon character's trinket is a fake, whereas this character's one is the real deal? (5 points.)

9) Does the character exist to harass, threaten, kill, or beat up the characters you don't like, or to get with the characters that you do? (4 points.)

10) Is the character related to a canon character, whether by marriage or bloodline? (3 points for marriage or immediate family, 1 point for more distant relations, such as cousins.) (No, definitely not.)

11) Does the character manage to beat one or more of the canon characters at their own game? (ex. in a wizards' duel in the Harry Potter universe, in a swordfight in the A Song of Ice and Fire universe.) (3 points per instance.) (Er… Yeah, she can beat the human characters in Creepypasta world for obvious reasons.) (+3)


12) Is the character of a species that is not normally found in the universe of the series for which this is written? (5 points.)

13) Is the character a racial hybrid? (1 point; ignore if you took the point for this earlier)
...When this is unusual in that universe? (2 points.)
...When this is unheard of in that universe? (5 points.)
...Are they a hybrid of more than two species? (4 more points.)
...More than four? (5 more points.)
...Do they have all of the strengths and none of the weaknesses of their respective species? (5 more points, and slap yourself.)

14) Does the character possess something that should not be found in the universe in which the story is set? (ex. An aetherlock rifle in the Enchanted Forest Chronicles.) (5 points.)

15) If they are a villain, does the character rise to the head of the universe's evil organization, if the series in question has one? (3 points; 5 if they actively dispatch the villain and take his place.)
...Or do they start up an evil organization of their own? (3 points.)

16) Do they reform a villainous character, whether through love or friendship or what have you? (3 points.)
...Even if the said villain was a complete monster beforehand? (5 points.)
...Or are they the one being redeemed? (2 points.)

(No, she won’t redeem.)

17) Does the character twig to the plot or what's really going on long before any of the other characters do? (2 points.)

18) Does the character wind up saving the day? (2 points.) (She more of those who RUIN the day)


19) Are they a part of, or join, the canon cast's organization, group, or team? (ex. They become a Jedi Master or a member of Slytherin House.) (2 points.)
...Is the aforementioned group a pretty exclusive one? (ex. Kingsguard.) (4 points.)

(No, she goes on her own)

20) Does the character fight another character whom they really should lose to (ex. A padawan fighting General Grievous), but manage to win or break even? (4 points.)

(No, she only fights and kills humans.)


21) Does the character's very existence break canon? (5 points.)

22) Is the character better at a specialty than a canon character of the same specialty? (ex. A character who is more skilled in potions than Severus Snape, or gets better grades than Hermione Granger.) (3 points per instance.) (I guess yes) (+3)

23) When the character gets themself into a fine scrape, does getting out of it involve a plot tweak or a bending of established canon? (3 points.)
...What about a bending of previously established fic canon? (4 points.)

24) Does the character have powers that do not belong in the universe of the series? (4 points.)

25) Is the character liked by all the canon characters they meet? (3 points.)

26) Does the character solve the personal problems of any canon character? (3 points per character.)


Section III: Flaws and De-Suifiers

1) Does the character have honest-to-goodness acknowledged faults that aren't small, insignificant, or innocuous? (ex. greedy, weak-willed, sickly) (-3 points.)
...Do these faults have some bearing on the plot, as opposed to just being there for kicks and giggles? (-1 more point.)

2) When the character gets themself out of trouble, is it through hard work and perseverance, rather than blind luck? (-1 point.) (-1)
...Is it at a high cost? (ex. losing a useful item in the process, a limb, or something else significant.) (-2 more points.)

3) Does the character have some physical aspect that actually does detract from their appearance, such as a nasty scar, beer belly, etc? (-1 point.) (White skin, no-pupiled eyes, being dead…) (-1)
...What about their voice? Do they sound raspy/whiny/unpleasant/etc? (-1 point.)
...Do they have gross habits or manners that are off-putting? (ex. picking their nose, spitting) (-1 point.)

4) Does the character look older than they are, if they are about 30 years old or more? (-1 point.)
...Have they aged badly? Have the years not been kind to them? (-1 point.)

5) If the character is not human, do they react or think in distinctly non-human ways? (-2 points.) (I guess it’s a yes.) (-2)

6) Do they have or did they have any significant problems or failings that they could have prevented but didn't? (ex. They dropped out of university for letting their grades slide too much.) (-3 points.)

7) Are they especially bad at any practical or useful skills, such as cooking, sewing, driving, etc? (-1 point per skill.) (She can’t sew and isn’t a good cook.) (-2)

8) Are they illiterate, in a society where literacy is expected? (-4 points.)

9) If they are a villain, do they have a code of honour or personal credo that they follow no matter what? (ex. an imperial officer who insists on treating prisoners decently, or who always makes sure there are no civilian casualties.) (-3 points.)
...Even if they know that the heroes can exploit it? (-4 points.)

10) Is the character disabled, physically or mentally, and does not have something to make up for it? (-4 points.) (Does it count of she can’t have children as is very tortured about it?)
...Is the character blind, mute, or deaf? (-3 points for each.)

11) Has the character ever made a bad decision? (-1 point if minor, -4 points if it's a major, life-changing decision. -2 points if it's something that made a lot of trouble or hardship for them for any decent length of time.) (-2)


12) Does the character have an inflated self-image, and honestly sees themself as being much better at a skill than they are? (-2 points.)

13) Is the character very shy? (-1 point)
...Do they come off as cold, even if they don't mean to be? (-1 point.)
...Are they not skilled at making friends or getting close to others? (-1 point.) (-1) (and she isn’t interested in it.)
...Or do they tend to put reserved people off by being too familiar too quickly? (-2 points.)
...Does the character get lonely easily? (-1 point.) (-1)

14) Have the character's principles ever created major trouble for them? (ex. Eddard Stark's devotion to honour and unwillingness to betray his principles was his downfall.) (-2 points.)

15) Does the character... (-1 point for each.)
...Dress badly? (mismatched colours, ill-fitting, ugly print dresses, etc.)
...Apply their makeup badly, if they wear it?
...Get called out on wearing skimpy or inappropriate clothing for their situation?

16) Is the character honestly ugly or unattractive, whether it's their looks or their personality? (-2 points.) (-2) (Her personality…)
...If the character is unnaturally beautiful, are they perceived as such and are considered scary or repulsive because if it? (-1 point.)

17) Was the character involved in some scandal that damaged their reputation and/or integrity? (-2 points.)

18) Is the character impotent or sterile? (-4 points.) (-4)
...If sterile, is it by their own choice? (-1 point instead.)
...Does this impotency or sterility cause them problems and/or pain? (-2 more points.) (-2) (A lot, actually.)

19) Is the character a slob that would make a monkey blush? Or, are they a neat freak that simply must have things just so? (-1 point.)

20) Is the character incompetent or below-average in their job/profession/field? (-3 points.)

21) Does the character have a potentially damaging or debilitating habit? (ex. smoking, heavy drinking.) (-2 points per habit. Ignore if their habit is 'cool' and they don't suffer any side-effects for it.)

22) Does the character have any phobias? (not just fear of something; it has to be crippling) (-1 point.) (-1)
...Do they play an important part in the plot? (-2 points.)


23) Does the character have a fixation/obsession with something? (-1 point.) (-1)
...Does it interfere with their day-to-day life? (-2 points.)


24) Are they an older person, and feeling their age? (-1 point.)

25) If they've got great skills in something (ex. martial arts, archaeology), is it because they've spent years training or studying to get to where they are? (-2 points.)

26) Do they get a tragic or very unhappy ending? (-3 points.) (-3)


27) Do they exhibit traits which do interfere with their calling? (ex. a callous paladin, a forgetful mage) (-1 point.)

28) Is the character naive, gullible, or easily taken advantage of? (-1 point.)
...And do they get taken advantage of? (-1 more point per instance.)

29) If the character is a vampire...
...Are they a repulsive Nosferatu-type? (-2 points.)
...Are they bestial and vicious, instead of the more suave, attractive type? (-2 points.)

30) Does the character work hard for the money/job/rank/etc that they have? (-1 point.)

31) If the character is high-ranking, do they ever feel under a lot of pressure from their job/chain of command? (-2 points.)

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(+1) x 4 + (+2) x 3 + (+3) x 3 + (+5) x 2 = 29

(-1) x 6 + (-2) x 5 + (-3) + (-4) = -17

29 - 17 = 6

She passed both tests too! :D Not bad ^^

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Ok, so… I made two tests with Aerial to see if she was balanced.

Aerial: Shouldn’t you be doing other stuff, like writing or drawing? -.-U

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 (Be awared, this journal is daaaaaaaaaamn long...)

PD: This test is done with the Aerial from after the revamp, since the one from ESC is quite cliché. (I bet she'd have gotten more points, being near the barrier or surpassing it.) 

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First, the short one (no idea who made it; I'll check later):

 

[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon 
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong (Normal strength for her species)
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[x] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red 
[ ] Their eyes change colour 
[ ] They have wings 
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size (HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA XD *is slapped* T_T)
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular 
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender (I don’t think that having only one guy after her (in a stalking way) is “very attractive to the opposite gender", especially since this guy isn’t very sane :/)

[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[x] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc (Yeah, it can be called a “sixth" sense)
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers 
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers 
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family (It’s a normal family, so nope.)
[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender 
[/] They have lots of friends/no friends (Let’s see… In rp’s, it’s a yes. In the story, it’s a normal number of friends and enemies alike. So half a point.)
[ ] They are emo/cutesy (Cutesy? Aerial? Pffff xD She can be nice, but not excessively cute. Well, only to Mexhor at some points, but he’s her bf, so I guess it doesn’t count.)
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are (I don’t think so. Especially after the war; she looks like a woman of her age.)
[x] They are currently in a relationship (lol,yep)
[] They have lots if morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem. (This one’s a hard one. Yes, she thinks that (but she spends equal time with friends and Mexhor), but she never says so. I guess it’s a no.)

[ ] They have a mental (???)
[ ] They have an emotional disorder (nope) 
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[x] They are a psycho (Yeah, she can be taken as a phycho.)
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent 
[ ] They have hallucinations 
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit 
[x] They have a 'special type' of soul 
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them (?????)
[x] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[x] Some part of their body glows 
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name (Angela’s a normal name)
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc. (Nope)
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[x] They are connected with a certain element (Two, in fact)
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label' (??? I guess… no? Als, she changes her clothes during the story.)
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives 
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something (their enemies know where they are and vice versa. So it’s a no.)
[ ] They have a rare blood type 
[ ] They cry blood 
[/] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown 
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[] They are very lively/happy (Nah, in a normal level. The lively one’s Delivan xD)

 [] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient (No xD)
[x] They are from a long line of (insert profession/power here) (Yes, a 3000 year-long Shadow Slayers, more exactly) 
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] The have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy (I’ll focus only on her main story and I’ll leave Links of the same chain out, so it’s a no.)

[ ] They are 'the chosen one' 
[ ] They have insomnia

<5 -Anti-Sue
6-15 -Balanced Character
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
26< -Mary-Sue

Good :D Time for the next test, the long one... =_= 

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 -By holepunch-

Point Ratings:
0-15: Doing fine; this character is balanced and believable, without any/many overwhelming Sue qualities. Good job!
15-25: This character is acceptable, but not humble.
25-40: Getting into Sue territory; you might want to go over the character again.
40-50: It would be a good idea at this stage to seriously reconsider this character, as they can qualify for a Mary Sue.
50+: You've got a Sue on your hands. I recommend killing it with fire.
80+: What the hell are you thinking!?


Section I: General Traits

1) The character's name, is it... (1 point each)
a) An unusual name for the character's locale/culture/race/time? (ex. Sakura or Hiromi for a non-Japanese, an English medieval peasant named Madison).
b) A more ordinary name, spelled differently so that it's more unusual?
c) A noun or verb not usually used as a name? (ex. Wolverine, Hunter, etc.)
d) A nickname that was chosen because it sounded cool? (ex. Raven, the Jackal)
e) A New Age, gothic, or just darn whimsical name? (ex. Moonlight Raven Winterschild, Ebony Tamora Eclipse, Lady Amelia Dianne Clark the Third, etc.) (???????? O_____o Who would name their character like that *sees Purple Light Beam* But… it’s normal in her world D: )
f) The name of a god, goddess, or mythical hero? (ex. Ares, Juno, Isis.)
g) Obviously the name of a historical figure? (ex. Bonaparte, Cleopatra, Diogenes. Common names like William don't count.)
h) Something just 'perfect' for them? (ex. Jade, for an aloof or cool character.)

2) Does the character have an impressive-sounding title or a unique address? (1 point.)

3) Is the character exceptionally beautiful or handsome? (2 points.) Or are they merely pretty or good-looking, but not striking? (1 point.) (Er… I consider her normal. Maybe it should count.) (+1)
...Is their beauty frequently described (or remarked upon by others)? (2 more points.)
...By characters who don't normally do that sort of thing? (2 more points.)
...Are they described in poetic terms or purple prose? (1 more point.)
...IN DIALOGUE!? (3 more points.)
...Do they still look good even when they should not be, such as after being tortured, wounded, badly sick, in battle, etc?) (2 more points.)

4) Do other characters fight over the character because of their good looks? (2 points.)
...Is anybody envious of or feels threatened by their beauty? (1 point.)

5) Conversely, is it emphasized that that character is not beautiful or attractive, despite evidence to the contrary, such as a great number of other characters falling in love with/lusting after them? (3 points.)

6) If male, is that character a chick magnet? If female, do all the guys want her? (3 points.)
...Does this charm defy sexual orientation? (4 points.)

7) About the character's charisma, are they able to make friends/allies easily? (1 point.) (+1)
...Even with otherwise unfriendly characters? (1 more point.)
...Can they regularly convert enemies to allies with their charm? (3 points.)
...Do other characters automatically trust them? (2 points.)
...Even characters that are of a suspicious/untrusting mindset? (4 points.)
...Are they good at talking someone into doing what they want or giving out information? (1 point.)

8) Does the character have a great physique, which is shown or described in loving or drooling detail? (2 points.)
...Does it defy their eating/exercise habits? (3 points.)
...Are their proportions impossible or extremely difficult to achieve? (ex. A D-cup on a 28-inch bust, a 6'1 girl weighing 100 pounds but not anorexic, etc.) (5 points.)

9) Looks aside, is the character in the pink of health despite detrimental habits? (ex. a chain-smoker with healthy lungs, very heavy drinker with healthy liver and skin, etc.) (5 points.)

10) Back to looks, does the character have any of the following? (1 point each.)
a) An unusual eye colour for their race/species? (ex. purple, blue if Asian, yellow) (She’s got purple eyes, but it’s normal in her species (ALL the members of her species have got purple eyes).)
b) A distinctive or unusual birthmark, especially if it's noticeable?
c) Eyes with any other odd characteristics, such as vertically slit pupils or mismatched colours?
d) Colour-changing eyes? (3 points.)
e) Mood-ring eyes? (5 points.)
f) An unusual hair colour for their race/species/animation? (ignore if it's dyed. 3 points if it's natural.)
g) Multicoloured hair? (5 points if it's natural.)
h) Cool tattoos?

11) Does the character have a scar that does not actually detract from their appearance, but makes them look cool? (1 point.)
...Is this scar in an odd shape for which there's no real accounting? (3 points.)

12) Does this character get a disproportionate amount of description or screen time compared to the other characters? (2 points—ignore if they're the main character.)

13) Does the character smell really good—and it's not their perfume, shampoo, or soap? (1 point.) (She does, but it is her shampoo, perfume and soap xD)

14) About the character's clothing... (1 point each.)
...Was it chosen to make them look extremely cool? (bonus point if it involves a lot of black, leather, high-heeled boots, or a trench coat. Or, god help you, all of the above.) (She’s got black clothes, but she can change them to colored and more normal ones. Guess it’s a +1 though) (+1)
...Is it very expensive and/or cool/trendy?
...Is it very impractical or inappropriate for the character's setting or profession, but nonetheless looks good? (ex. high heels on a soldier's combat boots, a miniskirt on a nun, etc?) (4 points.)
...Are there weapons stashed in there?

15) Can the character get away scot-free with being openly disrespectful or insubordinate toward authority figures and/or superior officers? (3 points for limited occasions, 5 points if it's regularly.) (hahahaha, no)

16) Is the character always 'right?' (2 points.)
...And do they regularly prove other characters 'wrong?' (2 more points.)
...Are the other characters cowed by this one's greatness and authority, and agree to do, think, or believe things the character's way, even if they were firm about their beliefs and habits before? (4 points.) (pffff,  no.)

17) If anyone disagrees with or dislikes the character, are they stupid, nasty, jealous, just plain wrong, or evil to 'justify' their dislike of the character? (5 points.)

18) Is the character socially popular? (1 point.)

19) If the character has an attitude, temper, or spitfire personality, are the tongue-lashings they dole out to other characters 'justified?' (2 points.)

20) If the character's in trouble, is there always someone there to bail their ass out of the fire? (2 points.) (lol, no.)

21) Is the character always punished more harshly than is normal for the infraction they've committed? (2 points.) (no)
...Or do they always get off easy? (4 points.) (She never does xD)

22) Does the character always have money for whatever they might want? (1 point.) (no. She has to work for it and is usually saving up for stuff.)
...Even if they have no day job or source of income? (2 more points.) (She HAS to work and help others to get money.)
...Are they fabulously wealthy, heir to a large fortune, or just provided for? (3 points.) (No, lol)

23) About the character's past, were they...
a) Tortured? (2 points.)
b) Orphaned? (2 points.)
c) Abandoned? (2 points.)
d) Enslaved? (2 points.)
e) Abused? (3 points.)
f) The only survivor of some disaster/genocide/etc? (3 points.)
g) Raped? (4 points.)

24) Is their whole family dead? (2 points)
...Did the family die/be killed in front of them? (4 points.)

25) Is this character meant to be an ideal? (ex. If male, is he a paragon of rugged masculinity and an inspiration to all? If female, is she all sweetness and purity, or else a tough independent warrior woman?) (3 points.) (All sweetness and purity… Angela… *laughs*)

26) Is the character unusually and improbably advanced for their age/social status/whatever? (ex. the 15-year old general of an army, the 12-year-old going to university). (5 points.)

27) Are they very accomplished? (2 points.)
...Are they remarkably accomplished in more than 1 area? (3 points for each.)

28) Is the character the youngest ever to attend an academy/join an organization/attain a rank/etc? (5 points.) (lol, no. She is a normal one)
...What about the only woman (or man, in a female-dominated field/society) to do that in known history? (4 points.) (No xD)

29) Is the character the best or among the very best at something they do? (3 points for each thing.) (no!)

30) Are even the most cynical, anal-retentive, exacting, or fussy characters awed or impressed by this character's skills? (4 points.) (Er… I guess not ._. She is the one who gets impressed by others’ skills)

31) Everybody loves music! Does the character... (1 point each.)
...Have a lovely singing voice?
...Play a musical instrument? (1 point for each instrument.) (+1)
...Can they play by ear?
...Can they make anyone cry with how beautiful their singing/playing is?
...Have an especially pleasant/sexy speaking voice?

32) Sprechen Sie Deutsch? Speaking of which, does the character fluently speak any languages apart from their native tongue? (1 point for each.)
...Do they have a gigantic vocabulary in some language, whether it's their native one or not? (1 point.)
...And does it exceed their age and/or educational level? (2 points.)

33) When the character does something, do they always succeed? (5 points.) (no…)

34) Are the character's parents/guardians unduly restrictive or demanding? (1 point.)
...Or do they just let their kid run amok? (2 points.)

35) Is the character undeservingly outcast or despised by people? (2 points.)
...Is it because of their talent, their powers, or their intellect? (4 points.)
...Is it because of their beauty? (5 points.)

36) Do they have a tormented, angst-ridden past? (3 points.)

37) Is the character very intelligent? (1 point.) (Normal intelligence, yet she’s pretty good at mathematical stuff.)
...Do they have very good intuition? (1 point.) (+1)
...Are they a genius? (3 points.)
...Do they have an IQ of 6420340? (5 points, and learn how IQ tests work, please.) (WTF?! O_O NO!)

38) Do they have a wide variety of talents? Are they a renaissance man/woman? (ex. cooking, mechanics, carpentry, driving, botany, etc.) (3 points.) (Normal variety)

39) Is the character a very good mimic for ordinary (non-magical) skills? (ex. they can emulate accents, dances, etiquette, etc, by observation) (2 points.) (no xD)

40) Do they have a great memory? (1 point.) (Normal one)
...Is it photographic or eidetic? (3 points.)

41) Is the character's appearance unsuited to the time or place? (ex. a cavewoman with shaved legs, somebody wearing bifocals in the historical Middle Ages, etc.) (4 points.)

42) Is the character related to royalty or nobility? (2 points.)

43) Are they particularly well-travelled? That is, greater than the norm for their surroundings? (1 point.)
...How about in a time/place where travel was not extensive? (1 more point.)

44) Are the character's flaws limited to small, insignificant ones that won't do any harm, or even endear them, such as adorable clumsiness? (3 points.) (She’s got phobias that make her be in danger, so no.)
...Are they mentioned, but never see use in-story? (Informed flaws.) (5 points.) (They are seen, believe me)

45) Does this character obviously get preferential treatment over the other characters—that is, do they get to take all the nicest presents? (ex. If a special or helpful item is found, this character gets it. If someone is to have a great bit of dialogue or action scene, it's this character, and so on and so forth) (5 points.) (She’ll be in a videogame and is the main character… I mean, if you complete tasks, people give you stuff. I guess this doesn’t count.)

46) Is the character able to make accurate snap judgements of other characters? (3 points)
...Are they always right? (5 points, and go soak your head.)


47) Is the character able to get away with just about everything they do, no matter how insolent/nasty/destructive/obnoxious/etc, without invoking karmic backlash of some sort? (5 points.) (Not always, but I’ll count it with +2) (+2)

48) Does the character have a familiar or an animal companion? (1 point.) (+1) (She’s got a cat that can turn into a bigger creature.)
...Is it something "cool," like a wolf? (1 more point)
...Is it a magical creature or a demon? (1 more point.) (+1)
...What about something major, powerful, or large, like a gryphon or a dragon? (2 more points.)

49) Does the character have any special/magical items that make the going easier on them? (ex. an enchanted sword, a glowing crystal ball to light the way, a bag of holding.) (2 points per item.) (She doesn’t in the story, but the player can equip her stuff. I suppose it doesn’t count.)

50) Is the character the most powerful mage in the world? (5 points.)
...Or are they just a very skilled or powerful one? (3 points.)
...Or are they just your average mage? (1 point.) (She isn’t a mage at all.)

51) Does the character practice a type of magic that is not usual for their sex/social standing/training level/whatever restrictions apply? (3 points.)

52) Is the character an alien, or something else not human? (1 point.) (+1)
...Are they of a 'superior' species? (3 points.)
...Are they a hybrid of some sort? (1 more point.)
...What about if hybrids are really rare or generally impossible in their canon/setting? (5 points.)

53) Is the character possessed of any cybernetics that enhance their natural abilities or give them new ones? (ex. infrared, super strength, ability to hack computers with their MIND) (1 point per enhancement.)
...If not cybernetics, is the character possessed of super-powers that give them these traits? (2 points per ability.)

54) If the character is a vampire, do they sparkle? (If they do, stop taking this test immediately and learn the bloody folklore. If you insist on continuing, take 15 points.) (I think someone hates Twilight. Don’t worry, I so do I.)
...Or are they just an ordinary vampire? (2 points.)
...Are they angsty? (3 more points.)
...Do they have less weaknesses than is traditional? (ex. not averse to garlic, cannot be harmed by silver) (2 more points per weakness removed.)
...Do they have more powers than is traditional? (3 more points per added ability.)
...Are they a 'good' vampire? (2 more points.)

55) Is the character tough, physically, emotionally, and/or mentally? (1 point.)
...Are space marines wimpy compared to this character? (2 more points.)
...Is the toughness only stated, but never actually shown? (4 more points.)

56) Do they regularly receive new skills or weapons? (3 points.) (No. She can use all of them, but improves after training.)


 

57) Do they master any skills in an improbably quick amount of time? (ex. becoming fluent in a language in a few weeks, mastering a type of magic within a few months where it usually takes years, etc.) (3 points.)

58) About weapons, can they use any? (1 point per weapon. Ignore if the character in question is with a military or paramilitary organization and this is included in the standard training package. Take points for non-standard weapons.) (Er… she hasn’t got a proper weapon. It’s her shadow… Guess it’s a +1) (+1)
...Do they tend to carry an arsenal along with them? (2 points.)
...Even when it's inappropriate to do so? (2 more points.)
...Do they carry a weapon that is inappropriate for the surroundings? (ex. a broadsword in WWII era, etc.) (4 points.)

59) Does the character look younger than they are? (1 point.)
...Significantly younger? (2 points; 1 if they use potions/suck life force/etc to remain young)
...Are they an immortal? (3 points.)
...Or is there no explanation for this at all, apart from a desire to keep the character young and pretty? (5 points.)

60) Is the character liked by the whole cast? (5 points)

61) Are the character's observations consistent with objective reality? (5 points) (No, she describes stuff from her point of view.)

Section II: Fanfic Characters

1) So when they get introduced, does the reader get scads and scads of description on them in fine, loving detail? (4 points.) (I usually give poor, basic descriptions u_u)

2) Do they ever get into a romantic or sexual relationship with a canon character? (3 points; 5 points per instance if they get with multiple canon characters.)
...Is the canon character altered in any way to better fit this character, or do they otherwise act differently when they're with them? (5 points.) (No, it’s with an OC)

3) Does this character take the spotlight away from the main cast? (4 points; 1 point if the OC in question is the main character in a cast of mostly original characters.) (No. She’s the main character of a non-fandom related story.)

4) Does this character ever show up one or more of the canon characters? (ex. A villainous OC humiliating Darth Vader or outwitting Havelock Vetinari.) (3 points per instance.)

5) Are the rules of the canon bent or broken for this character? (ex. a 9-year old being admitted to Hogwarts) (5 points per instance.) (No)

6) Is the character basically a gender-swapped version of a canon character? (3 points.)

7) Is the character a clone of a canon character? (2 points.)
...What if cloning isn't part of a world's canon? (5 points)

8) Does the character possess a trinket similar or identical to something a canon character has? (3 points; ignore if everyone in the canon has this item)
...Does it have the same powers/carry the same significance? (2 more points. Ignore if it's a typical item as above.)
...Does it turn out that the canon character's trinket is a fake, whereas this character's one is the real deal? (5 points.)

9) Does the character exist to harass, threaten, kill, or beat up the characters you don't like, or to get with the characters that you do? (4 points.)

10) Is the character related to a canon character, whether by marriage or bloodline? (3 points for marriage or immediate family, 1 point for more distant relations, such as cousins.)

11) Does the character manage to beat one or more of the canon characters at their own game? (ex. in a wizards' duel in the Harry Potter universe, in a swordfight in the A Song of Ice and Fire universe.) (3 points per instance.) (She isn’t in a fandom anymore.)

12) Is the character of a species that is not normally found in the universe of the series for which this is written? (5 points.)

13) Is the character a racial hybrid? (1 point; ignore if you took the point for this earlier)
...When this is unusual in that universe? (2 points.)
...When this is unheard of in that universe? (5 points.)
...Are they a hybrid of more than two species? (4 more points.)
...More than four? (5 more points.)
...Do they have all of the strengths and none of the weaknesses of their respective species? (5 more points, and slap yourself.)

14) Does the character possess something that should not be found in the universe in which the story is set? (ex. An aetherlock rifle in the Enchanted Forest Chronicles.) (5 points.)

15) If they are a villain, does the character rise to the head of the universe's evil organization, if the series in question has one? (3 points; 5 if they actively dispatch the villain and take his place.) (She isn’t a villain)
...Or do they start up an evil organization of their own? (3 points.)

16) Do they reform a villainous character, whether through love or friendship or what have you? (3 points.)
...Even if the said villain was a complete monster beforehand? (5 points.)
...Or are they the one being redeemed? (2 points.)

 

(No, no, no.)

17) Does the character twig to the plot or what's really going on long before any of the other characters do? (2 points.) (nope.)

18) Does the character wind up saving the day? (2 points.) (Does it count if she does in a group of several people? I’ll count it just in case) (+2)


19) Are they a part of, or join, the canon cast's organization, group, or team? (ex. They become a Jedi Master or a member of Slytherin House.) (2 points.)
...Is the aforementioned group a pretty exclusive one? (ex. Kingsguard.) (4 points.)

20) Does the character fight another character whom they really should lose to (ex. A padawan fighting General Grievous), but manage to win or break even? (4 points.)


21) Does the character's very existence break canon? (5 points.)

22) Is the character better at a specialty than a canon character of the same specialty? (ex. A character who is more skilled in potions than Severus Snape, or gets better grades than Hermione Granger.) (3 points per instance.)

23) When the character gets themself into a fine scrape, does getting out of it involve a plot tweak or a bending of established canon? (3 points.)
...What about a bending of previously established fic canon? (4 points.)

24) Does the character have powers that do not belong in the universe of the series? (4 points.)

25) Is the character liked by all the canon characters they meet? (3 points.)

26) Does the character solve the personal problems of any canon character? (3 points per character.) (She helps OC’s of the same story. I guess it doesn’t count.)

Section III: Flaws and De-Suifiers

1) Does the character have honest-to-goodness acknowledged faults that aren't small, insignificant, or innocuous? (ex. greedy, weak-willed, sickly) (-3 points.)
...Do these faults have some bearing on the plot, as opposed to just being there for kicks and giggles? (-1 more point.)

2) When the character gets themself out of trouble, is it through hard work and perseverance, rather than blind luck? (-1 point.) (-1)
...Is it at a high cost? (ex. losing a useful item in the process, a limb, or something else significant.) (-2 more points.) (-2)

3) Does the character have some physical aspect that actually does detract from their appearance, such as a nasty scar, beer belly, etc? (-1 point.)
...What about their voice? Do they sound raspy/whiny/unpleasant/etc? (-1 point.)
...Do they have gross habits or manners that are off-putting? (ex. picking their nose, spitting) (-1 point.)

4) Does the character look older than they are, if they are about 30 years old or more? (-1 point.)
...Have they aged badly? Have the years not been kind to them? (-1 point.)

5) If the character is not human, do they react or think in distinctly non-human ways? (-2 points.)

6) Do they have or did they have any significant problems or failings that they could have prevented but didn't? (ex. They dropped out of university for letting their grades slide too much.) (-3 points.)

7) Are they especially bad at any practical or useful skills, such as cooking, sewing, driving, etc? (-1 point per skill.) (-1) (She can’t drive.)

8) Are they illiterate, in a society where literacy is expected? (-4 points.)

9) If they are a villain, do they have a code of honour or personal credo that they follow no matter what? (ex. an imperial officer who insists on treating prisoners decently, or who always makes sure there are no civilian casualties.) (-3 points.)
...Even if they know that the heroes can exploit it? (-4 points.)

10) Is the character disabled, physically or mentally, and does not have something to make up for it? (-4 points.)
...Is the character blind, mute, or deaf? (-3 points for each.)

11) Has the character ever made a bad decision? (-1 point if minor, -4 points if it's a major, life-changing decision. -2 points if it's something that made a lot of trouble or hardship for them for any decent length of time.) (-2) (Trusting an OC I won’t mention.)

12) Does the character have an inflated self-image, and honestly sees themself as being much better at a skill than they are? (-2 points.)

13) Is the character very shy? (-1 point)
...Do they come off as cold, even if they don't mean to be? (-1 point.)
...Are they not skilled at making friends or getting close to others? (-1 point.)
...Or do they tend to put reserved people off by being too familiar too quickly? (-2 points.)
...Does the character get lonely easily? (-1 point.)

14) Have the character's principles ever created major trouble for them? (ex. Eddard Stark's devotion to honour and unwillingness to betray his principles was his downfall.) (-2 points.)

15) Does the character... (-1 point for each.)
...Dress badly? (mismatched colours, ill-fitting, ugly print dresses, etc.)
...Apply their makeup badly, if they wear it?
...Get called out on wearing skimpy or inappropriate clothing for their situation?

16) Is the character honestly ugly or unattractive, whether it's their looks or their personality? (-2 points.)
...If the character is unnaturally beautiful, are they perceived as such and are considered scary or repulsive because if it? (-1 point.)

17) Was the character involved in some scandal that damaged their reputation and/or integrity? (-2 points.)

18) Is the character impotent or sterile? (-4 points.)
...If sterile, is it by their own choice? (-1 point instead.)
...Does this impotency or sterility cause them problems and/or pain? (-2 more points.)

19) Is the character a slob that would make a monkey blush? Or, are they a neat freak that simply must have things just so? (-1 point.)

20) Is the character incompetent or below-average in their job/profession/field? (-3 points.)

21) Does the character have a potentially damaging or debilitating habit? (ex. smoking, heavy drinking.) (-2 points per habit. Ignore if their habit is 'cool' and they don't suffer any side-effects for it.)

22) Does the character have any phobias? (not just fear of something; it has to be crippling) (-1 point.) (-1) (Yuuuup)
...Do they play an important part in the plot? (-2 points.) (-2) (It causes her a lot of trouble. In-game, it’ll lower her states while fighting something she’s afraid of.)

23) Does the character have a fixation/obsession with something? (-1 point.)
...Does it interfere with their day-to-day life? (-2 points.)

24) Are they an older person, and feeling their age? (-1 point.)

25) If they've got great skills in something (ex. martial arts, archaeology), is it because they've spent years training or studying to get to where they are? (-2 points.) (-2)

26) Do they get a tragic or very unhappy ending? (-3 points.) (It’s a bitter-sweet ending. I’ll count it with -1.) (-1)

27) Do they exhibit traits which do interfere with their calling? (ex. a callous paladin, a forgetful mage) (-1 point.)

28) Is the character naive, gullible, or easily taken advantage of? (-1 point.)
...And do they get taken advantage of? (-1 more point per instance.)

29) If the character is a vampire...
...Are they a repulsive Nosferatu-type? (-2 points.)
...Are they bestial and vicious, instead of the more suave, attractive type? (-2 points.)

30) Does the character work hard for the money/job/rank/etc that they have? (-1 point.) (-1)

31) If the character is high-ranking, do they ever feel under a lot of pressure from their job/chain of command? (-2 points.)

 

Let’s see…

(+1) x 9 = 9

(+2) x 2 = 4

 

9 + 4 = 13 points so far.

 

(-1) x 5 = -5

(-2) x 4 = -8

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               -13

13-13 = 0

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Well, she passed both tests. Guess that’s a good thing :)

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Blitz: … -_-

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First, the short one:

 

[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon 
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong 

[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour (I don’t think it’s a strange color for a ghost.)

[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour (Silver gray… Nah, there are people with grey eyes.)

[ ] This happens to be red 
[ ] Their eyes change colour 
[ ] They have wings 
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[/] (if a female) they have large bra size (It’s a quite big, but normal size. She isn’t like those anime girls with more tits than head -.-)

[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular 
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender 

[x] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc (Yeah, it can be called a “sixth sense)
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers 
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers 
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family 
[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature

[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender 
[x] They have lots of friends/no friends (Totally xD Almost anyone who knows her doesn’t like her.)
[ ] They are emo/cutesy (HAHAHAHAHAHA)
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are

[x] They are currently in a relationship (Believe it or not, yes.)
[ ] They have lots if morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem. (“Kill them all” is her principle…)

[ ] They have a mental
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane (She’s already insane)
[x] They are a psycho (Yeah, totally)
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent 
[ ] They have hallucinations 
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc. (SHE is a ghost xD)
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit 
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul 
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[x] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows 
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name (Claire is a normal name. I checked it precisely to give her a normal name.)
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstice etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label' 

[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives 
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something 

 [ ] They have a rare blood type 
[ ] They cry blood 
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy 

[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of (insert profession/power here)

[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] The have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy 

[ ] They are 'the chosen one' 
[ ] They have insomnia

<5 -Anti-Sue
6-15 -Balanced Character
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
26< -Mary-Sue

11 – balanced character

 

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Point Ratings:
0-15: Doing fine; this character is balanced and believable, without any/many overwhelming Sue qualities. Good job!
15-25: This character is acceptable, but not humble.
25-40: Getting into Sue territory; you might want to go over the character again.
40-50: It would be a good idea at this stage to seriously reconsider this character, as they can qualify for a Mary Sue.
50+: You've got a Sue on your hands. I recommend killing it with fire.
80+: What the hell are you thinking!?

Example Scores:
Colonel Hans Landa (Inglourious Basterds): 10
Edward Cullen (Twilight): 92
Granny Weatherwax (Discworld): 10
Artemis Entreri (Forgotten Realms): 53
Riddick (Pitch Black, Chronicles of Riddick): 23

Remember, just because a character gets points for something doesn't mean that they're a Sue. It's when the points start to pile up that the trouble begins. Even if ones are innocuous, too many and you might have a problem on your hands...

Section I: General Traits

1) The character's name, is it... (1 point each)
a) An unusual name for the character's locale/culture/race/time? (ex. Sakura or Hiromi for a non-Japanese, an English medieval peasant named Madison). (Claire is a normal name.)
b) A more ordinary name, spelled differently so that it's more unusual?
c) A noun or verb not usually used as a name? (ex. Wolverine, Hunter, etc.)
d) A nickname that was chosen because it sounded cool? (ex. Raven, the Jackal) (Her nickname is chosen because she can control electricity: “Blitz” means “Lightning” in German.)
e) A New Age, gothic, or just darn whimsical name? (ex. Moonlight Raven Winterschild, Ebony Tamora Eclipse, Lady Amelia Dianne Clark the Third, etc.)

f) The name of a god, goddess, or mythical hero? (ex. Ares, Juno, Isis.) ( I don’t know of a goddess named Claire or Blitz xD)
g) Obviously the name of a historical figure? (ex. Bonaparte, Cleopatra, Diogenes. Common names like William don't count.)
h) Something just 'perfect' for them? (ex. Jade, for an aloof or cool character.)

2) Does the character have an impressive-sounding title or a unique address? (1 point.)

3) Is the character exceptionally beautiful or handsome? (2 points.) Or are they merely pretty or good-looking, but not striking? (1 point.) (+1)
...Is their beauty frequently described (or remarked upon by others)? (2 more points.) (Her bf doesn’t count for obvious reasons, so no.)
...By characters who don't normally do that sort of thing? (2 more points.)
...Are they described in poetic terms or purple prose? (1 more point.)
...IN DIALOGUE!? (3 more points.)
...Do they still look good even when they should not be, such as after being tortured, wounded, badly sick, in battle, etc?) (2 more points.)

4) Do other characters fight over the character because of their good looks? (2 points.)
...Is anybody envious of or feels threatened by their beauty? (1 point.)

5) Conversely, is it emphasized that that character is not beautiful or attractive, despite evidence to the contrary, such as a great number of other characters falling in love with/lusting after them? (3 points.)

6) If male, is that character a chick magnet? If female, do all the guys want her? (3 points.)
...Does this charm defy sexual orientation? (4 points.)

7) About the character's charisma, are they able to make friends/allies easily? (1 point.) (Pfffff, no, haha)
...Even with otherwise unfriendly characters? (1 more point.)
...Can they regularly convert enemies to allies with their charm? (3 points.)
...Do other characters automatically trust them? (2 points.)
...Even characters that are of a suspicious/untrusting mindset? (4 points.)
...Are they good at talking someone into doing what they want or giving out information? (1 point.)

8) Does the character have a great physique, which is shown or described in loving or drooling detail? (2 points.)
...Does it defy their eating/exercise habits? (3 points.) (She doesn’t eat; she’s dead…)
...Are their proportions impossible or extremely difficult to achieve? (ex. A D-cup on a 28-inch bust, a 6'1 girl weighing 100 pounds but not anorexic, etc.) (5 points.)

9) Looks aside, is the character in the pink of health despite detrimental habits? (ex. a chain-smoker with healthy lungs, very heavy drinker with healthy liver and skin, etc.) (5 points.) (She drinks a lot, but she’s a ghost, so it doesn’t affect her. Guess it’s a +5.) (+5)

10) Back to looks, does the character have any of the following? (1 point each.)
a) An unusual eye colour for their race/species? (ex. purple, blue if Asian, yellow)
b) A distinctive or unusual birthmark, especially if it's noticeable?
c) Eyes with any other odd characteristics, such as vertically slit pupils or mismatched colours? (+1) (Her eyes have no pupils.)
d) Colour-changing eyes? (3 points.)
e) Mood-ring eyes? (5 points.)
f) An unusual hair colour for their race/species/animation? (ignore if it's dyed. 3 points if it's natural.)

g) Multicoloured hair? (5 points if it's natural.) (O_o)
h) Cool tattoos?

11) Does the character have a scar that does not actually detract from their appearance, but makes them look cool? (1 point.) (Only a dot in her right arm, a very small one. It doesn’t make her look cool, though)
...Is this scar in an odd shape for which there's no real accounting? (3 points.) (I guess a syringe mark is easy to figure it came from.)

12) Does this character get a disproportionate amount of description or screen time compared to the other characters? (2 points—ignore if they're the main character.)

13) Does the character smell really good—and it's not their perfume, shampoo, or soap? (1 point.) (She doesn’t smell of anything –except for when she’s covered in blood; then she stinks.)

14) About the character's clothing... (1 point each.)
...Was it chosen to make them look extremely cool? (bonus point if it involves a lot of black, leather, high-heeled boots, or a trench coat. Or, god help you, all of the above.) (Lots of black and fingerless leather gloves.) (+2)

...Is it very expensive and/or cool/trendy? (Not expensive and… quite normal.)
...Is it very impractical or inappropriate for the character's setting or profession, but nonetheless looks good? (ex. high heels on a soldier's combat boots, a miniskirt on a nun, etc?) (4 points.)

...Are there weapons stashed in there? (She’ll have a knife attached to her belt, but not as decoration. However, since I’m focusing on her main story and not on Links of the same chain, it’s a no.)

15) Can the character get away scot-free with being openly disrespectful or insubordinate toward authority figures and/or superior officers? (3 points for limited occasions, 5 points if it's regularly.) (no.)

16) Is the character always 'right?' (2 points.)
...And do they regularly prove other characters 'wrong?' (2 more points.)
...Are the other characters cowed by this one's greatness and authority, and agree to do, think, or believe things the character's way, even if they were firm about their beliefs and habits before? (4 points.)

17) If anyone disagrees with or dislikes the character, are they stupid, nasty, jealous, just plain wrong, or evil to 'justify' their dislike of the character? (5 points.)

18) Is the character socially popular? (1 point.)

19) If the character has an attitude, temper, or spitfire personality, are the tongue-lashings they dole out to other characters 'justified?' (2 points.)

20) If the character's in trouble, is there always someone there to bail their ass out of the fire? (2 points.)

21) Is the character always punished more harshly than is normal for the infraction they've committed? (2 points.) (no)
...Or do they always get off easy? (4 points.)

22) Does the character always have money for whatever they might want? (1 point.)

...Even if they have no day job or source of income? (2 more points.) (She steals.)

...Are they fabulously wealthy, heir to a large fortune, or just provided for? (3 points.)

23) About the character's past, were they...
a) Tortured? (2 points.)
b) Orphaned? (2 points.)
c) Abandoned? (2 points.)
d) Enslaved? (2 points.)
e) Abused? (3 points.)
f) The only survivor of some disaster/genocide/etc? (3 points.)
g) Raped? (4 points.)

(She was killed in an unfair way.)

24) Is their whole family dead? (2 points)
...Did the family die/be killed in front of them? (4 points.)

25) Is this character meant to be an ideal? (ex. If male, is he a paragon of rugged masculinity and an inspiration to all? If female, is she all sweetness and purity, or else a tough independent warrior woman?) (3 points.) (No, hohohoho xD)


26) Is the character unusually and improbably advanced for their age/social status/whatever? (ex. the 15-year old general of an army, the 12-year-old going to university). (5 points.)

27) Are they very accomplished? (2 points.)
...Are they remarkably accomplished in more than 1 area? (3 points for each.)

28) Is the character the youngest ever to attend an academy/join an organization/attain a rank/etc? (5 points.)
...What about the only woman (or man, in a female-dominated field/society) to do that in known history? (4 points.)


29) Is the character the best or among the very best at something they do? (3 points for each thing.)

30) Are even the most cynical, anal-retentive, exacting, or fussy characters awed or impressed by this character's skills? (4 points.)

31) Everybody loves music! Does the character... (1 point each.)
...Have a lovely singing voice?
...Play a musical instrument? (1 point for each instrument.)
...Can they play by ear?
...Can they make anyone cry with how beautiful their singing/playing is?
...Have an especially pleasant/sexy speaking voice?

32) Sprechen Sie Deutsch? Speaking of which, does the character fluently speak any languages apart from their native tongue? (1 point for each.)
...Do they have a gigantic vocabulary in some language, whether it's their native one or not? (1 point.)
...And does it exceed their age and/or educational level? (2 points.)

33) When the character does something, do they always succeed? (5 points.)

34) Are the character's parents/guardians unduly restrictive or demanding? (1 point.)
...Or do they just let their kid run amok? (2 points.)

35) Is the character undeservingly outcast or despised by people? (2 points.) (+2)
...Is it because of their talent, their powers, or their intellect? (4 points.)
...Is it because of their beauty? (5 points.)

(It’s because she’s damn disagreeable and rude.)

36) Do they have a tormented, angst-ridden past? (3 points.) (+3) (I guess being killed in order to make a corrupted politician’s crimes is a tormented, angst-ridden past, even if the rest of her life she had a normal, happy life.)

37) Is the character very intelligent? (1 point.)
...Do they have very good intuition? (1 point.)
...Are they a genius? (3 points.)
...Do they have an IQ of 6420340? (5 points, and learn how IQ tests work, please.)

38) Do they have a wide variety of talents? Are they a renaissance man/woman? (ex. cooking, mechanics, carpentry, driving, botany, etc.) (3 points.)

39) Is the character a very good mimic for ordinary (non-magical) skills? (ex. they can emulate accents, dances, etiquette, etc, by observation) (2 points.)

40) Do they have a great memory? (1 point.) (+1)
...Is it photographic or eidetic? (3 points.)

41) Is the character's appearance unsuited to the time or place? (ex. a cavewoman with shaved legs, somebody wearing bifocals in the historical Middle Ages, etc.) (4 points.)

42) Is the character related to royalty or nobility? (2 points.)

43) Are they particularly well-travelled? That is, greater than the norm for their surroundings? (1 point.)
...How about in a time/place where travel was not extensive? (1 more point.)

44) Are the character's flaws limited to small, insignificant ones that won't do any harm, or even endear them, such as adorable clumsiness? (3 points.)
...Are they mentioned, but never see use in-story? (Informed flaws.) (5 points.)

45) Does this character obviously get preferential treatment over the other characters—that is, do they get to take all the nicest presents? (ex. If a special or helpful item is found, this character gets it. If someone is to have a great bit of dialogue or action scene, it's this character, and so on and so forth) (5 points.)

46) Is the character able to make accurate snap judgements of other characters? (3 points) (She mistrusts everyone, so she isn’t accurate at all.)
...Are they always right? (5 points, and go soak your head.)


47) Is the character able to get away with just about everything they do, no matter how insolent/nasty/destructive/obnoxious/etc, without invoking karmic backlash of some sort? (5 points.) (Yeah.) (+5)

48) Does the character have a familiar or an animal companion? (1 point.)
...Is it something "cool," like a wolf? (1 more point)
...Is it a magical creature or a demon? (1 more point.)
...What about something major, powerful, or large, like a gryphon or a dragon? (2 more points.)

49) Does the character have any special/magical items that make the going easier on them? (ex. an enchanted sword, a glowing crystal ball to light the way, a bag of holding.) (2 points per item.)

50) Is the character the most powerful mage in the world? (5 points.)
...Or are they just a very skilled or powerful one? (3 points.)
...Or are they just your average mage? (1 point.)

51) Does the character practice a type of magic that is not usual for their sex/social standing/training level/whatever restrictions apply? (3 points.)

52) Is the character an alien, or something else not human? (1 point.) (+1)
...Are they of a 'superior' species? (3 points.)
...Are they a hybrid of some sort? (1 more point.)
...What about if hybrids are really rare or generally impossible in their canon/setting? (5 points.)

53) Is the character possessed of any cybernetics that enhance their natural abilities or give them new ones? (ex. infrared, super strength, ability to hack computers with their MIND) (1 point per enhancement.)
...If not cybernetics, is the character possessed of super-powers that give them these traits? (2 points per ability.) (Somehow, yes.) (+2)

54) If the character is a vampire, do they sparkle? (If they do, stop taking this test immediately and learn the bloody folklore. If you insist on continuing, take 15 points.) (I think someone hates Twilight. Don’t worry, I so do I.)
...Or are they just an ordinary vampire? (2 points.)
...Are they angsty? (3 more points.)
...Do they have less weaknesses than is traditional? (ex. not averse to garlic, cannot be harmed by silver) (2 more points per weakness removed.)
...Do they have more powers than is traditional? (3 more points per added ability.)
...Are they a 'good' vampire? (2 more points.)

55) Is the character tough, physically, emotionally, and/or mentally? (1 point.)
...Are space marines wimpy compared to this character? (2 more points.)
...Is the toughness only stated, but never actually shown? (4 more points.)

56) Do they regularly receive new skills or weapons? (3 points.)

57) Do they master any skills in an improbably quick amount of time? (ex. becoming fluent in a language in a few weeks, mastering a type of magic within a few months where it usually takes years, etc.) (3 points.)

58) About weapons, can they use any? (1 point per weapon. Ignore if the character in question is with a military or paramilitary organization and this is included in the standard training package. Take points for non-standard weapons.)

...Do they tend to carry an arsenal along with them? (2 points.)
...Even when it's inappropriate to do so? (2 more points.)
...Do they carry a weapon that is inappropriate for the surroundings? (ex. a broadsword in WWII era, etc.) (4 points.)

(She doesn’t use weapons… unless you count her fists and feet :/)


59) Does the character look younger than they are? (1 point.)
...Significantly younger? (2 points; 1 if they use potions/suck life force/etc to remain young)
...Are they an immortal? (3 points.)
...Or is there no explanation for this at all, apart from a desire to keep the character young and pretty? (5 points.)

60) Is the character liked by the whole cast? (5 points) (No xD)

61) Are the character's observations consistent with objective reality? (5 points)


Section II: Fanfic Characters

1) So when they get introduced, does the reader get scads and scads of description on them in fine, loving detail? (4 points.) (No. She barely describes herself in her story amd doesn’t do it in a loving way precisely…)

2) Do they ever get into a romantic or sexual relationship with a canon character? (3 points; 5 points per instance if they get with multiple canon characters.) (No, it’s with an OC.)
...Is the canon character altered in any way to better fit this character, or do they otherwise act differently when they're with them? (5 points.)

3) Does this character take the spotlight away from the main cast? (4 points; 1 point if the OC in question is the main character in a cast of mostly original characters.)


4) Does this character ever show up one or more of the canon characters? (ex. A villainous OC humiliating Darth Vader or outwitting Havelock Vetinari.) (3 points per instance.) (nope.)

5) Are the rules of the canon bent or broken for this character? (ex. a 9-year old being admitted to Hogwarts) (5 points per instance.)

6) Is the character basically a gender-swapped version of a canon character? (3 points.)

7) Is the character a clone of a canon character? (2 points.)
...What if cloning isn't part of a world's canon? (5 points)

8) Does the character possess a trinket similar or identical to something a canon character has? (3 points; ignore if everyone in the canon has this item)
...Does it have the same powers/carry the same significance? (2 more points. Ignore if it's a typical item as above.)
...Does it turn out that the canon character's trinket is a fake, whereas this character's one is the real deal? (5 points.)

9) Does the character exist to harass, threaten, kill, or beat up the characters you don't like, or to get with the characters that you do? (4 points.)

10) Is the character related to a canon character, whether by marriage or bloodline? (3 points for marriage or immediate family, 1 point for more distant relations, such as cousins.) (No, definitely not.)

11) Does the character manage to beat one or more of the canon characters at their own game? (ex. in a wizards' duel in the Harry Potter universe, in a swordfight in the A Song of Ice and Fire universe.) (3 points per instance.) (Er… Yeah, she can beat the human characters in Creepypasta world for obvious reasons.) (+3)


12) Is the character of a species that is not normally found in the universe of the series for which this is written? (5 points.)

13) Is the character a racial hybrid? (1 point; ignore if you took the point for this earlier)
...When this is unusual in that universe? (2 points.)
...When this is unheard of in that universe? (5 points.)
...Are they a hybrid of more than two species? (4 more points.)
...More than four? (5 more points.)
...Do they have all of the strengths and none of the weaknesses of their respective species? (5 more points, and slap yourself.)

14) Does the character possess something that should not be found in the universe in which the story is set? (ex. An aetherlock rifle in the Enchanted Forest Chronicles.) (5 points.)

15) If they are a villain, does the character rise to the head of the universe's evil organization, if the series in question has one? (3 points; 5 if they actively dispatch the villain and take his place.)
...Or do they start up an evil organization of their own? (3 points.)

16) Do they reform a villainous character, whether through love or friendship or what have you? (3 points.)
...Even if the said villain was a complete monster beforehand? (5 points.)
...Or are they the one being redeemed? (2 points.)

(No, she won’t redeem.)

17) Does the character twig to the plot or what's really going on long before any of the other characters do? (2 points.)

18) Does the character wind up saving the day? (2 points.) (She more of those who RUIN the day)


19) Are they a part of, or join, the canon cast's organization, group, or team? (ex. They become a Jedi Master or a member of Slytherin House.) (2 points.)
...Is the aforementioned group a pretty exclusive one? (ex. Kingsguard.) (4 points.)

(No, she goes on her own)

20) Does the character fight another character whom they really should lose to (ex. A padawan fighting General Grievous), but manage to win or break even? (4 points.)

(No, she only fights and kills humans.)


21) Does the character's very existence break canon? (5 points.)

22) Is the character better at a specialty than a canon character of the same specialty? (ex. A character who is more skilled in potions than Severus Snape, or gets better grades than Hermione Granger.) (3 points per instance.) (I guess yes) (+3)

23) When the character gets themself into a fine scrape, does getting out of it involve a plot tweak or a bending of established canon? (3 points.)
...What about a bending of previously established fic canon? (4 points.)

24) Does the character have powers that do not belong in the universe of the series? (4 points.)

25) Is the character liked by all the canon characters they meet? (3 points.)

26) Does the character solve the personal problems of any canon character? (3 points per character.)


Section III: Flaws and De-Suifiers

1) Does the character have honest-to-goodness acknowledged faults that aren't small, insignificant, or innocuous? (ex. greedy, weak-willed, sickly) (-3 points.)
...Do these faults have some bearing on the plot, as opposed to just being there for kicks and giggles? (-1 more point.)

2) When the character gets themself out of trouble, is it through hard work and perseverance, rather than blind luck? (-1 point.) (-1)
...Is it at a high cost? (ex. losing a useful item in the process, a limb, or something else significant.) (-2 more points.)

3) Does the character have some physical aspect that actually does detract from their appearance, such as a nasty scar, beer belly, etc? (-1 point.) (White skin, no-pupiled eyes, being dead…) (-1)
...What about their voice? Do they sound raspy/whiny/unpleasant/etc? (-1 point.)
...Do they have gross habits or manners that are off-putting? (ex. picking their nose, spitting) (-1 point.)

4) Does the character look older than they are, if they are about 30 years old or more? (-1 point.)
...Have they aged badly? Have the years not been kind to them? (-1 point.)

5) If the character is not human, do they react or think in distinctly non-human ways? (-2 points.) (I guess it’s a yes.) (-2)

6) Do they have or did they have any significant problems or failings that they could have prevented but didn't? (ex. They dropped out of university for letting their grades slide too much.) (-3 points.)

7) Are they especially bad at any practical or useful skills, such as cooking, sewing, driving, etc? (-1 point per skill.) (She can’t sew and isn’t a good cook.) (-2)

8) Are they illiterate, in a society where literacy is expected? (-4 points.)

9) If they are a villain, do they have a code of honour or personal credo that they follow no matter what? (ex. an imperial officer who insists on treating prisoners decently, or who always makes sure there are no civilian casualties.) (-3 points.)
...Even if they know that the heroes can exploit it? (-4 points.)

10) Is the character disabled, physically or mentally, and does not have something to make up for it? (-4 points.) (Does it count of she can’t have children as is very tortured about it?)
...Is the character blind, mute, or deaf? (-3 points for each.)

11) Has the character ever made a bad decision? (-1 point if minor, -4 points if it's a major, life-changing decision. -2 points if it's something that made a lot of trouble or hardship for them for any decent length of time.) (-2)


12) Does the character have an inflated self-image, and honestly sees themself as being much better at a skill than they are? (-2 points.)

13) Is the character very shy? (-1 point)
...Do they come off as cold, even if they don't mean to be? (-1 point.)
...Are they not skilled at making friends or getting close to others? (-1 point.) (-1) (and she isn’t interested in it.)
...Or do they tend to put reserved people off by being too familiar too quickly? (-2 points.)
...Does the character get lonely easily? (-1 point.) (-1)

14) Have the character's principles ever created major trouble for them? (ex. Eddard Stark's devotion to honour and unwillingness to betray his principles was his downfall.) (-2 points.)

15) Does the character... (-1 point for each.)
...Dress badly? (mismatched colours, ill-fitting, ugly print dresses, etc.)
...Apply their makeup badly, if they wear it?
...Get called out on wearing skimpy or inappropriate clothing for their situation?

16) Is the character honestly ugly or unattractive, whether it's their looks or their personality? (-2 points.) (-2) (Her personality…)
...If the character is unnaturally beautiful, are they perceived as such and are considered scary or repulsive because if it? (-1 point.)

17) Was the character involved in some scandal that damaged their reputation and/or integrity? (-2 points.)

18) Is the character impotent or sterile? (-4 points.) (-4)
...If sterile, is it by their own choice? (-1 point instead.)
...Does this impotency or sterility cause them problems and/or pain? (-2 more points.) (-2) (A lot, actually.)

19) Is the character a slob that would make a monkey blush? Or, are they a neat freak that simply must have things just so? (-1 point.)

20) Is the character incompetent or below-average in their job/profession/field? (-3 points.)

21) Does the character have a potentially damaging or debilitating habit? (ex. smoking, heavy drinking.) (-2 points per habit. Ignore if their habit is 'cool' and they don't suffer any side-effects for it.)

22) Does the character have any phobias? (not just fear of something; it has to be crippling) (-1 point.) (-1)
...Do they play an important part in the plot? (-2 points.)


23) Does the character have a fixation/obsession with something? (-1 point.) (-1)
...Does it interfere with their day-to-day life? (-2 points.)


24) Are they an older person, and feeling their age? (-1 point.)

25) If they've got great skills in something (ex. martial arts, archaeology), is it because they've spent years training or studying to get to where they are? (-2 points.)

26) Do they get a tragic or very unhappy ending? (-3 points.) (-3)


27) Do they exhibit traits which do interfere with their calling? (ex. a callous paladin, a forgetful mage) (-1 point.)

28) Is the character naive, gullible, or easily taken advantage of? (-1 point.)
...And do they get taken advantage of? (-1 more point per instance.)

29) If the character is a vampire...
...Are they a repulsive Nosferatu-type? (-2 points.)
...Are they bestial and vicious, instead of the more suave, attractive type? (-2 points.)

30) Does the character work hard for the money/job/rank/etc that they have? (-1 point.)

31) If the character is high-ranking, do they ever feel under a lot of pressure from their job/chain of command? (-2 points.)

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(+1) x 4 + (+2) x 3 + (+3) x 3 + (+5) x 2 = 29

(-1) x 6 + (-2) x 5 + (-3) + (-4) = -17

29 - 17 = 6

She passed both tests too! :D Not bad ^^

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thisisspaaaaiiiin Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2014
www.youtube.com/watch?v=lVPONd…


No se como lo ha hecho el tío para que de más miedo.
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Lagoon-Sadnes Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
;_; *en el suelo* x_x

Foxy me hizo dar un respingo... No lo vi venir.
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Mira el lado bueno, ¡Foxy vuelve! (tira confeti)


Pues parece que van a estar a la vez los nuevos y los viejos (solo que estos estarán hechos mierda, y me imagino que serán más difíciles que los nuevos)

Algo que también me ha llamado la atención es que en una imagen se ve al prota con la mascara de Freddy y a Foxy delante, pero no le ataca. Pero en el vídeo, Foxy le salta encima sin que le de tiempo a ponerse la máscara. Si no hay puertas, ¿que otras formas habrá de defenderse (por dios, que nos dejen darles de hostias, todos les tenemos ganas)
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Lagoon-Sadnes Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
¡Yay! :dummy:

Jajajaja xD Dudo que gane el guarda dándole ostias a algo hecho de metal...

Bueno, por lo que he leído, los nuevos animatronics tienen reconocimiento facial, así que hay gente que especula que:

-Antiguos animatronics + máscara = Vives.

-Idem sin máscara = Mueres.

Y con los nuevos sería al revés. Si los nuevos te ven con máscara, tratarán de desmantelarte, con lo que ello conlleva...
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LillyCreative Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
do you do commissions?
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:iconlagoon-sadnes:
Lagoon-Sadnes Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, but they're closed by the time being... ^^U
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GarenaxMix Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Invitation to a roleplay, yo' want? .3.
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Lagoon-Sadnes Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Venga :D Lo malo es que me tengo que acostar ya ^^; Responderé mañana.
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GarenaxMix Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Vale
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Lagoon-Sadnes Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm...

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